SHUT UP

i have already started typing one story of mine when all of a sudden i remembered the story i wrote when i was in first year entitled shut up. i decided to 'recreate' it. i'll type the story the way i remember it. of course there'll be a great difference since i wrote it in tagalog but now i will be using english in writing. i'll also add whatever i want to add.

The sun's shining brightly and the birds are already singing when Lia(i got her name from a classmate at la salle) woke up. She prepared herself for school and went down after bathing and dressing herself.
"Good morning, Ma," she greeted her mom.
"Oh, good. You're already awake and dressed. Eat your breakfast before it gets cold," her mom said. Before her fork could even touch one food they heard a honk outside.
"Cassie's already here. Bye mom!" Lia went out of the house before her mom could say another word. She knows that her mom will have her invite Cassie to come eat with them.
Lia stepped into the car of her friend Cassie( i can't remember the nick name of Lia's original best friend. i think it was Mia but then i thought that it would be confusing if i use the name. imagine, Lia and Mia?).
"Hi Cassie! Good morning!" she greeted cheerfully.they made their cheeks touch( how do i say beso-beso in english? kissed their cheeks?)
"Hi Lia! Aren't you excited? today's the first day of our third year in college!" Cassie said with enthusiasm.
"Hah! if i didn't know you better i'd think that you're excited to study. but then I do know you better. i know you're only excited because of the new boys that you'll be meeting -- correction, good-looking boys," Lia kidded.
"You can't empathize because you haven't had a crush before," Cassie retorted. "it is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all (did i get that right?)," she quoted.
Lia just shook her head. her friend was a hopeless romantic.

They were now seated on a bench in their school. Lia noticed that Cassie was scanning the area.
"Jake is still here with his friends. and the Pretty Angels with no brains, too," Cassie said. Lia looked at the three girls who were far from them. they were talking to two handsome boys.
"Don't be surprised, Cassie. Bernadette's mom is the principal of this school right? and Antoinette's mom and Venice's dad-"
"-who also happens to be your dad ," Cassie reminded.
" --are patrons of our school," Lia continued.
Lia's dad left her mom when she was still a little child. her parents were separated and his dad had found Venice's mom. they were married soon after they met (this reminds me of twilight. dunno why). Cassie's parents also had contributed something to the school.it was as if they were a part of the establishment. the family of the Pretty Angel's and Cassie's family were close friends.
"yeah, i know. wait, isn't that Timothy?" Cassie pointed to one of the two boys who were talking to the three girls. " i wonder who's the guy he's with."
"he must be a new student," Lia concluded since she had never seen the guy on the campus before.

meanwhile, Timothy and his friend JV were 'cornered' by the Pretty Angels.
"Who's that friend of yours, Timothy? Care to introduce him to us?" Bernadette smiled sweetly.
Timothy obliged. "JV, these are the Pretty Angels: Bernadette, Venice, and Antoinette," he said. "Pretty Angels, meet JV."
"Hi JV." Bernadette flashed him a seductive smile (ohh!) while the two others a friendly one.
"Hi, guys. Nice meeting you." They heard the bell rang, signaling them to go to their respective rooms.
"The pleasure is ours, right girls?" Bernadette said.
"We need to go now. Bye," Timothy said.
"See you later JV!" Bernadette said.

"Hi Timothy," greeted one girl.
"Hi gorgeous!" he greeted back.
" Hi Timothy," said another.
"Hello, sexy," Timothy replied to another.
"It seems that you're well-known here, huh," JV commented as they were walking along the corridor. Timothy smiled.
"Yeah. It helps when one is as good-looking as me." The two laughed. Timothy stopped in front of a classroom, and so did JV. "My first class is here. Can you go find your classroom on your own or do you my help?"
"I'm sure i can manage on my own. See ya," JV said.
JV had already walked some paces when he and a girl collided.
"Oops! Sorry," they both said.
The girl's books fell on the floor. He helped her get up and collect her things. Their eyes met.
"Thank you," the girl said.
" Are you alright, miss?" JV asked.
"Oh yeah. Don't worry about it," the girl said. "You're new here, aren't you? Where's your first class?" The girl thought she could help the guy.
"At (on, in, at?) Room 213. Do you know where it is?"
"Oh so you're in the Art class. My friend's in there, too. Just walk straight ahead.It's the fourth room from here. See you!" the girl smiled and went on her way.
"Wait!" JV said. The girl looked back. " I'm JV.
"Maria Amelia Cassandra Fatima Concepcion De Castillo," she said. The guy looked confused. "Cassie for short."


Why do i get the feeling that this story is not as good as the original? something's missing. i wonder what.